The Baths at Virgin Gorda, BVI
She had risen early, taking advantage of her last day on Virgin Gorda in the British Virgin Islands. She wanted to go to the Baths before it got crowded with tourists and enjoy the relaxing pools between the enormous rocks. There was a certain energy in the quiet sanctuary of the water and a calming atmosphere.
The sun was barely above the horizon when she removed her clothes. Leaving them on the rocks she waded into the crystal-clear pools. The water was refreshing and she dipped below the surface feeling the sensual shock as it consumed her body. With eyes closed she let herself drift underwater for a few moments holding her breath. As she attempted to surface, she realized she was wedged between two boulders and could not raise her head above the water to breathe. She was trapped and no one was there to save her.
Christine Bolton - Poetry for Healing Β©ο»Ώ
148 words
In response to What Pegman Saw β Photo Prompt, Virgin Gorda, BVI
Word Prompts:
A relaxing story, that ended sadly. I wanted to save her. Get to know her name at least. Nice story, Christine, beautifully written.
Thank you so much Kelvin! Iβm happy you liked it and thanks for the nice comment π
I was enjoying the waters with her and No!!!
Well described, even if a tragic ending for her.
Moral: always swim with a buddy. πjust kidding. I found the tiny triangle of air above where the boulders meet threatening, as well.
I was actually there a long time ago and parts of it are a little precarious π³ Thanks for reading!
Did not expect this bit of horror. This piece is beautifully tragic. Great job.
Oh thank you so much! It needed something I thought π
I was absolutely shocked by the finality of this idyllic beginning in the swim. An excellent piece of work Christine. π
Thank you so much John π You’re very kind.
There was some good descriptive writing, especially “There was a certain energy in the quiet sanctuary of the water and a calming atmosphere”. The end is tragic; poor woman stuck beneath the boulders.
Thank you Penny π I appreciate it.
Oh goodness, Christine! A relaxing day gone bad! Poor dear!π
Yes, so scary ππ
Yrs, that would be horrible!!ππ
The first part was really lovely, but wow what a tragic end. Still, we all will come to it someday. This would be a fine way to die. Plus, nothing is wasted in the sea. Thanks for stopping by!
Thanks so much and also for the great photo prompt π
Thank you so much. My first time here π
I am sure your readers underwent the suffocation the character endured. Tragic end. π
Thanks for reading π
oh, could she be in another dimension? lost in her own thoughts she’s in a dangerous situation now.
Solitude is a wonderful thing but can sometimes be dangerous :-
oh yes it can especially if no one knows where you are.
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Oh! That’s sad. But well written. π
thanks so much Punam π
My pleasure, Christine. ππ
Loved the image your writing has conjured. The end…. well she is your character and you are deciding her fate!
Thanks dear Sadje. I had to come up with something and I didn’t think a merman was going to pop up π Lol
My pleasure.
I want to rescue her, too!
Thank Jami π. That means sheβs likeable π
I think I interpreted her as being me!
Oh that’s even better Jami. Thanks for looking at it that way. I should have chosen a better ending though! Maybe she’ll be rescued in chapter 2 π Have a great Sunday.
I will! I hope my little flash fiction didn’t traumatize you ππ
You should read Richard Flanagan’s Death of a River Guide. I was totally traumatised by it.
I sure didn’t expect that! Bravo for the very punchy ending, it’s not easy to surprise readers with such a short story!!
Oh thank you so much!. You know I usually stick to poetry but sometimes I like to get out of the comfort zone ππ
Oh no, don’t let it end like this–I want to rescue her. I was going along for the swim and it was SO lovely.
I guess she went out doing a wonderful thing…
Thank you so much! Yes, she was and in a beautiful place – sorry about the sad ending π’π