The Baths at Virgin Gorda, BVI

The Baths at Virgin Gorda, BVI

She had risen early, taking advantage of her last day on Virgin Gorda in the British Virgin Islands.  She wanted to go to the Baths before it got crowded with tourists and enjoy the relaxing pools between the enormous rocks.  There was a certain energy in the quiet sanctuary of the water and a calming atmosphere.

The sun was barely above the horizon when she removed her clothes. Leaving them on the rocks she waded into the crystal-clear pools.  The water was refreshing and she dipped below the surface feeling the sensual shock as it consumed her body.  With eyes closed she let herself drift underwater for a few moments holding her breath.  As she attempted to surface, she realized she was wedged between two boulders and could not raise her head above the water to breathe.  She was trapped and no one was there to save her.


Christine Bolton - Poetry for Healing Β©ο»Ώ

148 words

In response to What Pegman Saw – Photo Prompt, Virgin Gorda, BVI

Word Prompts:

Sanctuary

Barely

  39 comments for “The Baths at Virgin Gorda, BVI

  1. February 9, 2019 at 5:46 pm

    Oh no, don’t let it end like this–I want to rescue her. I was going along for the swim and it was SO lovely.

    I guess she went out doing a wonderful thing…

    • Christine Bolton
      February 9, 2019 at 7:37 pm

      Thank you so much! Yes, she was and in a beautiful place – sorry about the sad ending πŸ˜’πŸ’•

  2. February 9, 2019 at 6:45 pm

    I sure didn’t expect that! Bravo for the very punchy ending, it’s not easy to surprise readers with such a short story!!

    • Christine Bolton
      February 9, 2019 at 7:35 pm

      Oh thank you so much!. You know I usually stick to poetry but sometimes I like to get out of the comfort zone πŸ™‚πŸ’•

  3. February 9, 2019 at 8:43 pm

    You should read Richard Flanagan’s Death of a River Guide. I was totally traumatised by it.

  4. Christine Bolton
    February 9, 2019 at 9:01 pm

    I will! I hope my little flash fiction didn’t traumatize you πŸ™‚πŸ’•

  5. Jami Carder
    February 9, 2019 at 10:37 pm

    I want to rescue her, too!

    • Christine Bolton
      February 9, 2019 at 11:55 pm

      Thank Jami πŸ™‚. That means she’s likeable πŸ’•

      • Jami Carder
        February 9, 2019 at 11:59 pm

        I think I interpreted her as being me!

      • Christine Bolton
        February 10, 2019 at 8:23 am

        Oh that’s even better Jami. Thanks for looking at it that way. I should have chosen a better ending though! Maybe she’ll be rescued in chapter 2 πŸ™‚ Have a great Sunday.

  6. February 10, 2019 at 1:07 am

    Loved the image your writing has conjured. The end…. well she is your character and you are deciding her fate!

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 8:21 am

      Thanks dear Sadje. I had to come up with something and I didn’t think a merman was going to pop up πŸ™‚ Lol

      • February 10, 2019 at 9:59 am

        My pleasure.

  7. February 10, 2019 at 1:42 am

    Oh! That’s sad. But well written. πŸ’ž

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 8:19 am

      thanks so much Punam πŸ™‚

      • February 10, 2019 at 12:53 pm

        My pleasure, Christine. πŸ˜ŠπŸ’ž

  8. February 10, 2019 at 4:05 am

    oh, could she be in another dimension? lost in her own thoughts she’s in a dangerous situation now.

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 8:18 am

      Solitude is a wonderful thing but can sometimes be dangerous :-

      • February 10, 2019 at 4:08 pm

        oh yes it can especially if no one knows where you are.

      • Christine Bolton
        February 10, 2019 at 4:23 pm

        🀭

  9. February 10, 2019 at 7:47 am

    I am sure your readers underwent the suffocation the character endured. Tragic end. πŸ™

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 8:17 am

      Thanks for reading πŸ™‚

  10. February 10, 2019 at 9:45 am

    The first part was really lovely, but wow what a tragic end. Still, we all will come to it someday. This would be a fine way to die. Plus, nothing is wasted in the sea. Thanks for stopping by!

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 10:44 am

      Thanks so much and also for the great photo prompt πŸ™‚

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 5:01 pm

      Thank you so much. My first time here πŸ™‚

  11. February 10, 2019 at 11:43 am

    Oh goodness, Christine! A relaxing day gone bad! Poor dear!πŸ’—

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 5:00 pm

      Yes, so scary πŸ™‚πŸ’•

      • February 10, 2019 at 5:01 pm

        Yrs, that would be horrible!!πŸ˜ŠπŸ’•

  12. February 10, 2019 at 1:13 pm

    There was some good descriptive writing, especially “There was a certain energy in the quiet sanctuary of the water and a calming atmosphere”. The end is tragic; poor woman stuck beneath the boulders.

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 4:29 pm

      Thank you Penny πŸ™‚ I appreciate it.

  13. February 10, 2019 at 1:46 pm

    I was absolutely shocked by the finality of this idyllic beginning in the swim. An excellent piece of work Christine. 😊

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 4:28 pm

      Thank you so much John πŸ™‚ You’re very kind.

  14. February 10, 2019 at 2:14 pm

    Did not expect this bit of horror. This piece is beautifully tragic. Great job.

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 4:27 pm

      Oh thank you so much! It needed something I thought πŸ™‚

  15. February 10, 2019 at 2:15 pm

    Moral: always swim with a buddy. 😊just kidding. I found the tiny triangle of air above where the boulders meet threatening, as well.

    • Christine Bolton
      February 10, 2019 at 4:26 pm

      I was actually there a long time ago and parts of it are a little precarious 😳 Thanks for reading!

  16. February 11, 2019 at 9:55 am

    I was enjoying the waters with her and No!!!
    Well described, even if a tragic ending for her.

  17. February 11, 2019 at 11:53 am

    A relaxing story, that ended sadly. I wanted to save her. Get to know her name at least. Nice story, Christine, beautifully written.

    • Christine Bolton
      February 11, 2019 at 12:20 pm

      Thank you so much Kelvin! I’m happy you liked it and thanks for the nice comment πŸ™‚

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