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Replacement

You are lonely you say, but you are with me
Settling for the status quo, you say, but you are with me

You are not where you want to be
Not alone, but not with me
 
Enamored with the thought of being with someone
But not with me
 
You had it once before, you said
But not with me

Is it a dream or a wish that you have?
But never of me
 
Maybe a desire for someone, anyone
But not for me
 
Am I a just a convenience? A replacement?
Sorry, that’s not me

I am not what you want
Because I am me


Christine Bolton - Poetry for Healing ©

Image by
Natálie Šteyerová from Pixabay 
Grace at D'Verse Poets is supporting our Poetry Form Ghazal
which was hosted by Gay Cannon two weeks ago.  
A Ghazal is a poem that is made up like an odd numbered
chain of couplets, where each couplet is an independent
poem. It should be natural to put a comma at the end of
the first line. The Ghazal has a refrain of one to three
words that repeat, and an inline rhyme that preceedes the
refrain. Lines 1 and 2, then every second line, has this
refrain and inline rhyme, and the last couplet should refer
to the authors pen-name…
The rhyming scheme is AA bA cA dA eA etc.

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  21 comments for “Replacement”

  1. navasolanature
    June 20, 2019 at 6:59 pm

    Your use of ‘me’ as the end word works well and gets that punchline in at the end of the ghazal. Enjoyable

    • Christine Bolton
      June 20, 2019 at 8:18 pm

      Thank you! I appreciate it very much 🙂

  2. Gay Reiser Cannon
    June 12, 2019 at 5:11 am

    Your ghazal captures the jilted love, drinking away the whole affair thing that seems to be the gist of what the classic ghazals are meant to do. I think this was really successful. Kudos.

    • Christine Bolton
      June 12, 2019 at 9:32 am

      Thank you so much for your lovely comment 🙂 It was my first Ghazal so I am thrilled 💕

  3. Grace
    June 8, 2019 at 7:01 am

    I really like that concluding couplet, standing on your own. What also works well was the me refrain in each couplet. A strong voice for the ghazal. Thanks for participating in our poetry form challenge.

    • Christine Bolton
      June 8, 2019 at 10:19 am

      Thank you Grace! I really appreciate it. I enjoy the challenges and learning new forms 🙂

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  5. paeansunplugged
    June 7, 2019 at 1:56 am

    Love where you took it! 💞🙂

    • Christine Bolton
      June 7, 2019 at 8:17 am

      Yes, screw him!! I should have named it Transition Man Lol 🙂💕

  6. Rosemary Nissen-Wade
    June 7, 2019 at 12:28 am

    I very much like the way this progressed.

    • Christine Bolton
      June 7, 2019 at 8:18 am

      Thank you Rosemary! 🙂

  7. Darnell Cureton
    June 7, 2019 at 12:17 am

    Reminds me of two people living together but having separate lives. Not a happy time.

    • Christine Bolton
      June 7, 2019 at 8:19 am

      It was a dating situation from long ago. Yes, not a happy time 😔

  8. enigmasthoughts
    June 7, 2019 at 12:17 am

    Wow.

    • Christine Bolton
      June 7, 2019 at 8:19 am

      Thank you! 🙂

  9. map195
    June 6, 2019 at 10:42 pm

    awsome

    • Christine Bolton
      June 7, 2019 at 8:20 am

      🙂

  10. Sadje
    June 6, 2019 at 10:28 pm

    Loved the way your poem went. No more compromise.

    • Christine Bolton
      June 7, 2019 at 8:21 am

      That’s right Sadje! He was told to sling his hook!!!! 😳

      • Sadje
        June 7, 2019 at 8:50 am

        👍👌

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