Her hair long and black as a raven’s wing Glorious, loose curls falling down her back She walked to forget his words that did sting Not realizing she had come off track
Stopping briefly, she put down her backpack and stood staring up at the vast blue sky
Realizing she knew the answer why He was insecure, she was beautiful But did he really have to make her cry? His actions had left her feeling vengeful
Frank Hubeny is hosted at D'Verse Poets tonight and has challenged ged us with a Dizain. The form is 10 lines with 10 syllables per line with a rhyme pattern of ababbccdcd This is my first attempt at this form
Her hair long and black like a raven’s wing, great descriptor, Christine. I like the way you broke up the lines into 4-2-4 stanzas. It works well for your turn.
Interesting subject, and excellent dizain. I love what you did with that middle stanza.
Thank you so much Rosemary! That means so much to me 🙂 I had never tried this form before. It’s tricky isn’t it?
You’ve mastered it very well, especially for a first attempt.
Thanks again for a great challenge 🙂
Nicely executed Dizain Christine. Engaging read – good job.
Thank you so much for that Rob!nnI found it so difficult to do 😬
I like how you split the dizain into three parts. I am going to have to try doing this.
Thanks Frank. It was the only way I could keep the thread! Counting all this syllables kept moving me off track 😞👍🙂
i liked the connection between his insecurity and her revenge
Thanks Gina. I think it was supposed to have two sides like a sonnet, I hope anyway! 🙂
I think it paired well like bookends Christine
Thank you Gina 🙂💕
Her hair long and black like a raven’s wing, great descriptor, Christine. I like the way you broke up the lines into 4-2-4 stanzas. It works well for your turn.
Thanks Lisa. I found this form quite difficult 😏
I’m experimenting with different ways of using it.
Beautiful first attempt though 😍
Thanks so much. It was more difficult than it looks!!