You have bathed me Soothed me Drank my tears and carried me away on your fierce current You have given me your frozen surface so I might skate in the moonlight Your magical existence changes colors with the sun From morning golden pond to shimmering diamonds as twilight claims the day ~~~~~~~~~~~~ I am deep like my sometimes still waters Beneath my surface in its dark mystery live creatures you never see and plants that need no light from the sun Replenished by constant heavy rains I sometimes swell to my limits and crest Breaking my banks and then I am not loved
Amaya is hosting D'Verse Poets tonight and she has prompted us as follows: Tonight, I challenge you to a two-part prompt. Write a poem using apostrophe, and you can name your object/recipient, or choose to be more cryptic than declaring, “O Love…” for instance. This part is optional, or you can skip the first part and just share this portion. Write a response from the perspective of your object/recipient, which will in essence also use apostrophe.
Christine,
I really like these lines,
“I sometimes
swell to my limits
and crest
Breaking my banks”
This is when I love someone the most. When they show up real.
I really like how your ending contrasted the usual joy in ‘my cup overfloweth’ type thinking and lets us consider the real danger in having too much of a good thing. Great, Christine, thanks for posting!
I enjoyed the two perspectives of the river, Christine, the romantic and the realistic. I love the idea of skating in the moonlight and the lines:
‘From morning
golden pond
to shimmering
diamonds
as twilight
claims the day’
and the way they contrast with the deep, still waters that hide a dark mystery. The final line is sad but true.
I do love the ending in particularly…. moving from loving to vile when it breaks its banks
Yes, two sides of the same coin 🙂
Christine,
I really like these lines,
“I sometimes
swell to my limits
and crest
Breaking my banks”
This is when I love someone the most. When they show up real.
Yes Ali, I agree. They have shown up for real and mean it ❤️
Thank you for reading ☺️
You are welcome.
I thoroughly enjoyed this, wonderful work
Thank you so much! ☺️
I really like how your ending contrasted the usual joy in ‘my cup overfloweth’ type thinking and lets us consider the real danger in having too much of a good thing. Great, Christine, thanks for posting!
Thanks Amaya. I enjoyed your prompt!
Beauifully penned, Christine.
Thank you Beckie. You made my day! ☺️❤️
Always a pleasure, Chirstine! 💓
You have bathed me, so ender and compassionate, moves deep in me.
Thank you very much Paul. I’m happy it resonated with you ☺️
Gorgeous!!!
Thanks Mel🙂💕
I enjoyed the two perspectives of the river, Christine, the romantic and the realistic. I love the idea of skating in the moonlight and the lines:
‘From morning
golden pond
to shimmering
diamonds
as twilight
claims the day’
and the way they contrast with the deep, still waters that hide a dark mystery. The final line is sad but true.
Thank you Kim.I really appreciate it. I love that I am always learning something at D’Verse 🙂
You did it so well.
Thank you so much Sadje. ☺️
You’re welcome 😇
I like your descriptions of skating in the moonlight and how magical existence changes colors.
Thank you so much Frank 🙂
A very interesting take on this prompt!
Thanks Dwight. I almost didn’t participate inn the prompt tonight but then it ‘flowed’ like a river 🤣
Amazing how that works. This is all new for me, so it was quite a challenge as well.
I just read yours and commented. It was great!
Thank you!