Dawn

Dawn

A flock of starlings
shaken like a carpet
against a stormy grey sky
released a cacophony of sounds
breaking the silence of dawn
 
Whistling wind howled
through leafless trees
as a thick mist hung mysteriously
in suspension above the lake
waiting for instructions
 
The sun struggled to crack the sky
so it might cast its beams of light
The moodiness of the landscape
cried for relief from the darkness
and the earth craved warmth
 
 
Christine Bolton - Poetry for Healing ©

Frank Tassone is hosting D'Verse Poets tonight
and he has prompted us to write a poem in the
aesthetic of the Imagists
 

  32 comments for “Dawn

  1. June 18, 2020 at 11:38 pm

    Wonderful images created by your words. Very vivid.

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 1:14 pm

      Thank Sadje 🥰

      • June 19, 2020 at 4:11 pm

        You’re welcome 😉

  2. June 19, 2020 at 4:07 am

    Love the imagery….especially “shaken like a carpet”!

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 12:18 pm

      Thank you Punam ☺️❤️

      • June 19, 2020 at 1:33 pm

        You are welcome, Christine. 🙂

  3. June 19, 2020 at 4:15 am

    Wonderful. Your poem plays out that early morning experience so well 🙂

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 12:17 pm

      Thanks Chris ☺️

  4. June 19, 2020 at 4:56 am

    Lovely use of imaging!

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 12:17 pm

      Thanks so much ☺️

  5. June 19, 2020 at 6:25 am

    Vivid imagery, Christine: the flock of starlings shaken like a carpet and the moodiness of the landscape crying for relief.

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 12:17 pm

      Thanks Kim. I really enjoyed this prompt ☺️

  6. June 19, 2020 at 6:35 am

    I’m always going to think of this brilliant line when I see murmurations
    “shaken like a carpet”

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 12:16 pm

      Thanks so much Laura. It always reminds me of that when they are startled ☺️

  7. June 19, 2020 at 8:13 am

    Vivid imagery, paired perfectly with that photo. Excellent!

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 12:16 pm

      Thanks so much Frank. I love creating a picture ☺️

  8. June 19, 2020 at 8:31 am

    wonderful words

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 12:15 pm

      Thanks so much Debi 🙂

  9. June 19, 2020 at 10:29 am

    Beautiful!

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 3:44 pm

      Thank you so much 🥰

  10. June 19, 2020 at 3:22 pm

    I like your images in this poem, both real and metaphorical!

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 8:55 pm

      Thank you Dwight ☺️

  11. June 19, 2020 at 4:02 pm

    The birds all flying like that is called a murmuration and it’s fantastic to watch. Love the poetry!

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 4:25 pm

      That’s right! I’m happy liked it John ☺️

  12. June 19, 2020 at 4:35 pm

    The first two lines of each stanza provide some great imagery.

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 8:56 pm

      Thanks Ken. I appreciate it ☺️

  13. June 19, 2020 at 7:22 pm

    Love the image of the flock of starlings shaken like a carpet…

    • Christine Bolton
      June 19, 2020 at 9:14 pm

      Thank you so much ☺️

  14. June 20, 2020 at 4:47 pm

    Beautiful imagery. (K)

    • Christine Bolton
      June 20, 2020 at 9:31 pm

      Thanks so much 🥰

  15. June 20, 2020 at 6:56 pm

    Ominous and desolate landscape that definitely could use some brightening.

    • Christine Bolton
      June 20, 2020 at 9:28 pm

      It’s always the darkest before the dawn 😦 🙂💕

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