Every evening when the sun hangs low
I go to the river’s edge to reminisce and cry
It is there that we would sit and talk
about anything and everything
I had been besotted with her
Since she has been lost to me
Time has passed slowly
And memories stay vivid
Grateful, I sit and dream
of how it might have been
Before she disappeared without a trace
I had loved her deeply
Asking for her to marry me but
she had resisted over and over
Making excuses, needing time to think
She had visited less after that day
Avoiding me most likely
I became despondent and sad
Imploring her to come for a swim
Just one more time I begged
She reluctantly agreed
and was a wary of me
I did not pay much heed
Once we were in the water
I begged her marry me, please!
She ignored my pleading
I placed my hands on her shoulders
pushing her down
Holding her under the water
Until she drowned
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Ingrid is guest host at D'Verse Poets tonight and has prompted
us with Exploring the Narrative Voice.
The challenge is to write a poem in the voice of a fictional character.
It can be any character you like, and you can introduce it in your own
voice if you choose (à la Coleridge, though I certainly wouldn’t insist
on this) but the main body of the poem must be in the voice of your
character. If you wish, you can write a dramatic monologue, such as
My Last Duchess by Robert Browning; or create a spirit voice through
whom your poem speaks, as in Stevie Smith’s The River God. The choice
is yours: I want you to experiment with fiction in your poetry.
I am presenting a reworked poem from 2018. I think it fits the
Image by No-longer-here from Pixabay
Excellent Christine, so well written! But very dark…
Thanks so much Rob. Yes a little dark 😳☺️
This is incredibly dark and potent, Christine! I love how elegantly you have carried out the theme of love gone wrong 💝💝
Thank you Sanaa. It’s fun to go to the dark side in our writing every now and again ☺️
How sad and tragic that ending. Like what was said, it was a twist in the story.
Thank you Grace. Yes a deadly twist 😦
Lol I know ☺️ the prompt called for it 😳😦
Nicely done. Some guys just can’t handle rejection.
Thanks Ron. Chilling isn’t it? 😦
This is like a murder ballad… have you ever listened to Nick Cave’s record with the same time. This reminds me of “Where the Wild Roses Grow” were he sung duet with Kylie Minogue.
No I did not know it but I just watched the video. Oh yes, most similar apart from the rock. Quite creepy really 😦
What a dark tale! It rushes along to the climax, drawing us along with your words. Well done.
Thank you Beverly. I’m happy it worked ☺️💕🌺
Cool poem! It reminds me of the Neil Young song “Down By the River”
Oh right Nick! I had completely forgotten about that song ☺️👍
This is so dark and sinister Christine! It fits the prompt perfectly, thank you 🙂 How unrequited love turns bitter and then deadly…
Thank Ingrid. I am happy it worked ☺️
Oh wow, Christine I was not expecting the twist! It’s so interesting how in some peoples’ minds love and murder go hand in hand!
Thanks Lisa. Yes I agree although I couldn’t quite get the female to do the murdering! 😳👍
You’re welcome 🙂
Surprise ending ❤️
Thanks Paula. It was Macabre Night! ☺️
Very well written Christine. It’s very dark story
Thanks Sadje. The prompt was dark so I went with it 😧💕🌺
You’re welcome 😉