The Ground You Walk On
It is on this ground that I took my first steps
Unsure, shaking and stumbling
The road straight and narrow
Merciful to someone young and naïve
Over time it became uneven
With twists and turns
At times unnavigable
Bottomless potholes hidden
beneath puddles of rain
Deep cracks to trap and trip
Ensnaring those without caution
It was on the same ground
that I worshipped you
You, who would lead me along
with a promise
Never to be kept
This ground hard and unforgiving
Hurting my bones
Blistering my soles
I kissed this ground you walked on
And it led me on a road to nowhere
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Ingrid is hosting D'Verse Poets tonight and has prompted us
with concrete poetry.
For this challenge, I want you to write a poem using only concrete nouns,
subject matter and imagery. For the purposes of this exercise, the
following words are banned: soul, love, lust, dreams, sorrow, suffering,
heartache, wonder, etc.
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This is incredibly evocative, Christine! 💝 The metaphor works so well in describing the consequences of following a path that seems alluring to one at first.
Thank you dear Sanaa. ☺️💕 Yes we all veer off road from time to time!
Brilliant build to your metaphor here. We get to walk that road with you before we know what it signifies.
Thank you. You’re so kind 😳💕
I love the metaphor of this journey though the ending was filled with sadness.
Such is life sometimes. Thanks Grace 💕☺️
Lovely imagery. This made me think of the line from Kahlil Gibran’s The Prophet in the section on love:
“When love beckons to you, follow him,
Though his ways are hard and steep.”
Oops, I’ve come up as anonymous – it’s Sunra Rainz here!
Thank you for letting me know Sunra ☺️💕
Thank you Sunra! What a beautiful quote you shared. ☺️💕
Life is full of blind alleys. I love how you worked with the extended metaphor all the way with those concrete images.
Thank you. I appreciate it very much ☺️
Fine realization of the bumpy / uncertain / un-navigable road some relationships can be. Solid, concrete imagery. Salute!
Thanks so much Ron ☺️💕
This digs deep ~~~ great poem!
Thanks Helen! ☺️💕 Much appreciated
Christine this is one of the best examples of concrete poetry – so tangible and the hurts come through the cracks all along the way
Oh I am so pleased Laura. Thank you for the feedback I was hoping I didn’t mess up on the prompt 💕☺️
I hope you’re walking more sure-footedly along a more suitable road today, Christine.
Thanks David. Yes they do have a way of evening out, don’t they? ☺️💕
This is poignant, Christine. It can easily happen when we place too much trust in the undeserving.
Thank you Ingrid. I think we have all traveled this road at some point in our lives 💕☺️
For sure! ❤️
Heartbreaking poem Christine
Thanks Sadje. It’s just life ❤️