A red bandana brought from Havana Lou wore She was Rosanna from south Savannah She swore They ate bananas in their pajamas Galore! Singing hosannas in the cabana next door Carlos Santana Hannah Montana do more
They shouted out loud to quieten the crowd Please cease! Rosanna allowed Santana to cloud her peace Hannah of course vowed she would remain proud At least Now Lou never cowed With gun, in he ploughed Police! Santana in shroud Carried out unbowed Deceased
Grace was hosting DVerse Poets tonight and challenged us to write a Lai The Lai This form looks to be a very simple form comprising of a five syllabled couplet followed by a two syllable line. The number of lines in each stanza is fixed at nine and the couplets must rhyme with each other, as the two syllable lines must also rhyme. In English this line is probably the most difficult part of the poem. The stanza's rhyme pattern is... a. a. b. a. a. b. a. a. b. This is my first attempt at this!
I have been writing poetry since I was a child and it has helped in the good times and bad times. I am always looking within to find the answers to life's problems and to write thought-provoking poetry and prose.
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Christine
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24 thoughts on “Tropicana – A Lai”
That Lai kicks butt, Christine! Instead of The Eagles song, These Lying Eyes, it’s these rhyming lais! 🙂
That Lai kicks butt, Christine! Instead of The Eagles song, These Lying Eyes, it’s these rhyming lais! 🙂
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LOL! Rhyming Lais ….I love it! Thanks so much Lisa 🙂💕
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You are welcome. I even tickled myself on that one 🙂
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🤣
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Enjoyed the Lai. First time or not, It was good.
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Thanks Darell. I didn’t realize that so many words rhymed with Bananas!! 🙂
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😉
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Go to the head of the class! You’ve managed a difficult format and entertained us with quite a tale. BRAVO
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Thank you so much Beverly! Yes it was tricky trying to get a story to flow with that rhyming format 😳
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How fun is that!
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Lol! Thanks Mel 😆
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Love the walk on the wild side with this Lai
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Thanks 🙂
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It’s difficult to get anything going with this form, but you tackled it in the only way that makes sense, I think—with humour.
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I agree Jane! 🙂
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I really enjoyed this, true to form while telling a story. This form was awkward for me, but yours flows so smoothly! Great work! 🙂
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Thank you so much. I agree it is not easy but I certainly had fun with it! 🙂💕
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You have totally nailed it Christine and what a delightful tale! Loved the flow! 😊💞
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Thanks! It was fun 🙂💕
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Great! My pleasure. 🙂❤️
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I very much enjoyed this narrative lai – very light and engaging. You did this effortlessly. Thank you for joining our poetry challenge form.
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Thank you Grace. It was fun learning something new 🙂
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A lovely lai Christine, you made it fun and it really flows 🙂💖
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Thank you so much! I guess the trick is finding a word that has a lot of fun rhymes! 🤣
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