Revenge – A Dizain

Her hair long and black as a raven’s wing
Glorious, loose curls falling down her back
She walked to forget his words that did sting
Not realizing she had come off track
 
Stopping briefly, she put down her backpack
and stood staring up at the vast blue sky
 
Realizing she knew the answer why
He was insecure, she was beautiful
But did he really have to make her cry?
His actions had left her feeling vengeful
 
 
Christine Bolton - Poetry for Healing ©

Frank Hubeny is hosted at D'Verse Poets tonight
and has challenged ged us with a Dizain.
The form is 10 lines with 10 syllables per line
with a rhyme pattern of ababbccdcd
This is my first attempt at this form 

17 thoughts on “Revenge – A Dizain”

1. Beautiful first attempt though 😍

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   1. Thanks so much. It was more difficult than it looks!!

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2. Her hair long and black like a raven’s wing, great descriptor, Christine. I like the way you broke up the lines into 4-2-4 stanzas. It works well for your turn.

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   1. Thanks Lisa. I found this form quite difficult 😏

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      1. I’m experimenting with different ways of using it.

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3. i liked the connection between his insecurity and her revenge

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   1. Thanks Gina. I think it was supposed to have two sides like a sonnet, I hope anyway! 🙂

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      1. I think it paired well like bookends Christine

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      2. Thank you Gina 🙂💕

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4. I like how you split the dizain into three parts. I am going to have to try doing this.

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   1. Thanks Frank. It was the only way I could keep the thread! Counting all this syllables kept moving me off track 😞👍🙂

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5. Nicely executed Dizain Christine. Engaging read – good job.

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   1. Thank you so much for that Rob!nnI found it so difficult to do 😬

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6. Interesting subject, and excellent dizain. I love what you did with that middle stanza.

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   1. Thank you so much Rosemary! That means so much to me 🙂 I had never tried this form before. It’s tricky isn’t it?

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      1. You’ve mastered it very well, especially for a first attempt.

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      2. Thanks again for a great challenge 🙂

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